The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided line graph illustrates the count of closed
shops
and new
shops
that opened in one country from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
, there were more closures than
openings
in 2011 and the difference was about 2000.
Also
, there were as many closures as
openings
in 2014.
Then
, after the small fluctuations around 6500, the closures experienced a sharp decrease of roughly 6000. Looking at the details, before a considerable increase between 2012 and 2014, the
openings
experienced a dramatic decline to approximately 4000.
Moreover
, after the numbers of
openings
and closings were almost equalled in 2014, the count of opened
shops
witnessed a noticeable decrease.
Then
, the latter remained at the same level for 2 years, about 4000.
Furthermore
, the least number of closings during
this
period was in 2015,
however
,
then
,
this
count jumped suddenly to 5000. Afterwards, there were only small fluctuations, in the past 2 years. As for the number of newly built
shops
, it experienced a noticeable decline of 1000 in 2018.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, openings with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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