The diagram bellows shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the process of how
sugar
cane is processed into sugar
. Overall
, the manufacture consists of seven stages, starting with the harvesting of sugar
cane at a certain age, and ending at the drying and cooling stage.
Before it becomes consumable sugar
, sugarcane must first be harvested in the fields under a specific condition when it is between 12 and 18 months old. These plants are placed into a crushed machine to get their sweet water. After that, the juice needs to be purified to remove unwanted particles or dregs using a funnel tool, which already contains a limestone filter.
At the fifth stage in manufacturing, the purified juice is heated in a big boiler until it thickens like syrup, containing crystal grains. Next,
a mechanical process is carried out to separate crystals from the syrup, namely centrifugation. Finally
, these grains are placed into a large container for drying and cooling before being ready to pack.Submitted by nineband9s on
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