The graph below gives information about the origin of passengers entering Mexico on international flights, 2005-2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the origin of passengers entering Mexico on international flights, 2005-2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the nationality of the tourists entering Mexico between 2005 and 2010 by international flights.
Overall
, the main point
that is
noticeable is that
number
of the United States
entries
is the highest during the whole period. To look more in detail, the amount of
Canada
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entries
increased steadily between 2005 and 2010, but there is an exception in 2009. The USA reached a peak in 2007
by
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with
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just under 7 million
entries
. Both the amount of the USA and
south
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South
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America
entries
fluctuated between 2005 and 2010.
Furthermore
, the
number
of Europe
entries
in 2010 is nearly double the
number
of
south
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South
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America
while
it is almost time three as much as South
America
in 2007.
While
the
number
of Europe
entries
rose gradually between 2005 and 2008, South
America
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American
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entries
went up and down. The highest amount
of
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in
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Europe was in 2008 with approximately 2 million.
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