Some people state that the national teams and an individual sportsman and sportswomen should be financially sponsored by the government or non-government body. how far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Today, as the rivalry among nations has soared, international sports competitions, like
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, are at the centre of
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. Some argue that national teams and athletes have to be supported financially. It is agreed that supporting them can increase their concentration toward focusing more on
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in upcoming competitions
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Develop the essay further by completing your response to cover all main points. This includes fully addressing why financial sponsorship is important and exploring potential counterarguments.
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Incorporate relevant and specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention instances where government or private funding has significantly impacted certain sports or athletes.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is connected with smooth transitional phrases to improve the cohesion and flow of your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Include a clear conclusion that summarizes your main points and reiterates your position.
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The introduction provides a clear understanding of the topic and acknowledges the relevance of financial sponsorship in sports.
coherence and cohesion
The essay demonstrates an understanding of the topic and begins to form an argument in favor of financial sponsorship for athletes and sports teams.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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