The bar chart illustrates the manufacturing of coffee in four different regions in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the manufacturing of coffee in four different regions in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2010.
One stirring feature of the chart is that, from 1990 to 1995 the
cultivating
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of
coffee
in Indonesia and Vietnam remained static. The
cultivating
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of
coffee
in Brazil from 1990 to 1995 in 5 years increase approximately from 0.7
million
tones
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tonnes
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and reaches one
million
.
However
, Columbia shows a downward trend,
production
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coffee
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of coffee
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drop
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from 0.6
million
tones
to about 0.5
million
tones
. From 2000 to 2010 Brazil still hold the position of the largest
coffee
manufacturer country. Their
production
of
coffee
crossed just over
a
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1.8
million
tons. Meanwhile, the second leader was Columbia in 2000, but he took
last
place in 2010. In one decade, The
production
of
coffee
in Vietnam and Indonesia progressively
increase
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and reaches nearly
quarter
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a quarter
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million
tones
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tonnes
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.
Overall
, the most striking feature of the chart is the
production
of
coffee
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up in Brazil, but in Columbia over the period it is
plummet
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plummeting
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.
However
, in Indonesia and Vietnam has increased since 2000 year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, million, tones, production with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
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