The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.

The graph below shows the unemployment rates in the US and Japan between March 1993 and March 1999.
The line graph depicts the proportion of
the
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unemployed
member
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members
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of
public
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the public
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in different countries, namely
US
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the US
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and
Japan
in a
6 year
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period. Looking at an
overall
formation, it is readily apparent that the
indication
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exhibited by both countries are distinctly divergent, with the United States
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a significant decline in unemployment rates,
while
Japan
's rates displayed a more moderate yet upward line.
According to
what is shown, the
USA
and
Japan
had started at around 7% and 2.5% respectively. As there was a significant dip in the unemployment ratio in the
USA
during the first three years, there was a gradual climb in
Japan
's ratio.
Thereafter
the
USA
's proportion fluctuated wildly at about 5.5
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until nearly the beginning of 1997,
while
the proportion in
Japan
was increasing
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in the same period.
Consequently
, the two
countries'
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ratios continued their usual
behavior
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until March 1999 when
Japan
exceeded the
USA
at about 4.5% and 4% respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, usa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unemployment rate
  • Trend
  • Comparison
  • Period
  • Sharp increase/decrease
  • Correlation
  • Economic policies
  • Technological advancements
  • Global economic conditions
  • Consumer spending
  • Social welfare
  • Public sentiment
  • Predictions
  • Economic strategies
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