In the past, people used to go to museums to learn facts about culture and history. Nowadays people can find all this freely on the Internet so the museums are no longer important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many years ago, people
was
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interested in historical culture and often made a
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to one
of
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those historical
places
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and museums but today they prefer to
cheak
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check

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their website and see all the pictures online
instead
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of having a personal
visit
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. In modern
word
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words

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, it is understandable that
use
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the use

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of technology gaining in popularity and more people tend to use it in all different matters
as well as
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a
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virtuall
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virtual

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tour
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. I personally disagree with
disintegration
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the disintegration

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of
museum
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museums

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and believe the more we
extent
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the
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virtuall
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virtual
virtually

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tour
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the more unpopular actual
muesums
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museums

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become. The following
essaay
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essay

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wiil
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will

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discuss both agreement and disagreement on the matter. On
positive
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the positive

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side,
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virtuall
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virtual
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tour
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tours

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can be less time
amd
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and

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money consuming
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money-consuming

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while
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, it only needs a
high speed
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data network and
an
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apply

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electronic devices like a smartphone or a
labtop
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laptop

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, in another hand it is more
convienient
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convenient

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.
For example
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,
recentlly
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recently

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due to
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inflation
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rate in Turkey many international visitors who visited Istanbul could not
aford
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afford

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a
visit
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to some of the historical
places
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in the city since the price has risen
significantlly
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significantly

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so they all tried a
virtuall
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tour
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which is totally free to use. On
negative
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the negative

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side,
musuems
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museums

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are part of a nation's culture and it is vital to keep their history alive.
However
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, it has become less
atractive
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attractive

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since people can have
aceess
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access

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to all the details online which will result
of
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muesums
become
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becoming

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outdated or
irrelevent
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irrelevant

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.
I
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In

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conclusion,
it is clear that
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internet
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Internet

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had an impact on visitors
of
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historical
places
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and made it easier to
visit
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these
places
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online but it is really important to keep
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this
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places
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for
younger
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generation since they are one of the greatest
part
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parts

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of a
cultue
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culture

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an
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and

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tradition.

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