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You have invited a friend to visit you next month. Unfortunately, you are not able to meet him/her. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – Apologize for the change of plans – Explain why you are unable to meet him/her – Suggest another time for him/her to visit.

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Dear Aman, How're you ? As you know ,
On
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last
 Monday , we both made a plan to meet each other
on
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this
 upcoming Friday . Unfortunately , I have to travel
another
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 city because of some
office related
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works
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. So , we cannot meet on that
day
. Actually , what happened I took a
day
 off from the Organization
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 Friday . But , there is an urgent related to quality purpose is going to happen in LONDON with
customer
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. Previously ,
this
 meeting was
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to
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 my senior colleague ,
because
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 of some health issues ,he is not able to attend that meeting . So , my Manager requested me to go for that and I cannot
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 it any cost . But , don't worry about that . what about on 25th or 26th
december
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 on the
occassion
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occasion
 of Christmas ? We both have holidays from our
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. I made a particular plan for these two days . we will not only go to 'Blue Mountain Village' to celebrate Christmas ,but on the next
day
 , we will go to Toronto City for some shopping . I
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 you will come on that
day
 .
Otherwise
 , tell me any other option in changes of plan and timing
according to
 your convenience . I can't wait to see you . Love , Harjeet
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complete response
Ensure to include necessary details like why an alternative date is possible or what changes make the new plan feasible.
logical structure
Develop transitions between ideas to enhance the logical flow of the letter.
single idea per paragraph
Maintain a clearer separation of ideas per paragraph to improve readability.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate for the context, maintaining politeness while conveying the message.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately structured, creating a warm and personal touch.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Apologize sincerely - 'I am really sorry,' 'Please accept my apologies,' 'It pains me to inform you.'
  • Change of plans - 'Due to unforeseen circumstances,' 'I regret to inform,' 'An unexpected situation has arisen.'
  • Reason for change - 'Unfortunately, I have been called away on business,' 'A family emergency has come up,' 'I have an unavoidable commitment'
  • Assurances - 'Believe me, this was not anticipated,' 'I regret any inconvenience this may cause,' 'I hope you can understand my predicament'
  • Alternative suggestions - 'Could we reschedule your visit to...,' 'How about meeting up during the...,' 'Would it be possible for you to come at a later date?'
  • Eagerness to meet - 'I am eager to catch up,' 'I look forward to our meeting,' 'I am excited at the prospect of seeing you soon.'
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