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Writing Task 2 You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introduced? Do you think they are a positive or negative development? You should write at least 250 words.

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In the
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 centuries, many laws have been approved to reduce the number of working
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 for employees. These laws were mainly asked by the employees themselves who wanted to improve their life condition and,
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, they were a positive development. In Italy, the working-
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 limit has decreased over the years and nowadays it is fixed at 40
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 a week over 5 working days. Notably, there is a lot of discussion if
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 limit should be reduced again to 36
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 a week in just 4 days. As a fact, many companies are experimenting with
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 option even without a law and they
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 the results. In fact, studies show that if workers have more free time, they become more productive and are able to complete all their tasks in a smaller amount of time.
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, their life conditions would
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 improve considerably. Having three days off, many people would be able to spend more time with their families, to practice sports or to just relax. In conclusion, the laws that limit working
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 for employees have been a positive development.
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Provide more specific examples from different countries or regions to support why these laws were introduced.
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Expand on whether working hour limitations are a positive or negative development in different sectors or job types.
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Ensure a balanced argument by discussing potential negatives or counterpoints to limiting working hours.
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Clarify the connection between current laws and productivity from a broader perspective.
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Improve the logical flow by further elaborating on how too many working hours directly impacts life quality.
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Clear mention of the current situation in Italy regarding working hours and experimental changes.
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Well-structured essay with both an introduction and a conclusion.
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Positive tone and clear stance on the development of working hour limitations.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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