The graph below shows how elderly people in the United States spent their free time between 1980 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The provided line chart gives information about five hobbies that retired people in the United
State
engaged in during their free Fix the agreement mistake
States
times
over three decades, starting from 1980.
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time
To begin
with, The most popular one was watching TV, with under two-thirds in the first year, it increased gradually to 70 percent
for 20 Change the spelling
per cent
years
before it fell trivially, 5%, for the last
decate
. Interestingly, Correct your spelling
decade
hicking
was the most absorbing activity in the Correct your spelling
hiking
last
years
. Although
it started at 20%, soon it soared to over 80 percent
.
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per cent
However
, old people did not oftenly
surf the internet for two decades, with nearly 5 Correct your spelling
often
percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
elderly
Correct article usage
the elderly
utilized
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utilising
internet
in the early Correct article usage
the internet
years
, it increased gradually to over 10 percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Then
it skyrocketed for ten years
,
and ended at 50 Remove the comma
apply
percent
. Reading Change the spelling
per cent
ascillated
between 30 and 20 Correct your spelling
oscillated
oscillate
percent
by 2000, Change the spelling
per cent
then
it increased dramatically to 60 percent
, which is more than that of surfing the internet. Nearly half of the old Change the spelling
per cent
poeple
went to the theatre in 1980. Correct your spelling
people
Whereas
,
the theatre lost its audience for the first ten Remove the comma
apply
years
,it shrunk to 30 percent
by 1990; Change the spelling
per cent
afterward
, it Change the spelling
afterwards
experinced
a steady rise and ended at over 40 Correct your spelling
experienced
percent
.
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per cent
Overall
, more elderly people were absorbed to
four activities, except for watching TV.Change preposition
in
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