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People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. Do you agree or disagree?

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 agree,
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 in
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 contemporary world there are few problems ,
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standard of life is right
know
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now
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 much better as compared to previous centuries . The main reasons behind
this
is
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an
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 advancement in technology and
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development of
medical
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 sector. Without a doubt,
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having a
having
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 technology
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helps to increase the standard of living , which was not
availble
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available
 to ancient people.
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 , developed telecommunication helps
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 to stay connected with their loved one regularly without being worried about
distance
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 , staying connected to your dearest one makes life
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easier
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gives
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joy in terms of emotion,which was not possible previously as there were no
such
 inventions. Moving to
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 aspect,
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 centuries people's had to deal with many diseases that were not cureable
due to
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 of development in
medical
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 sector which
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 in
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decline in life span
however
 ,
due to
 the rapid growth in medical science now there are
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availble
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available
 to the diseases and some vaccinations that helps to pervent from dangerous illnesses.
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,in India, poleo is
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the
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 dangerous disease which was making people
handicap
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previously but
last
 two decades ago medical
scientist
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scientists
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find
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 the vaccination
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 that disease now
that
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country is considered
poleo free
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.
Thus
 lifespan increases than before. In conclusion, the development of technology and
medical
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 sector
nowadys
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nowadays
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 to
better
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a better
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 lifestyle than
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centuries as
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 time there was not much growth in these sectors.
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coherence cohesion
Strong introduction and conclusion that adequately frame the discussion.
task achievement
Good use of specific examples, especially the discussion on the eradication of polio, to support your points.

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