Some think secondary and high school students should be allowed to choose academic courses leading to university or practical courses leading to careers such as carpenters. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying the fact that

students

in high and secondary

school

need to take academic

courses

before

university

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belief

that no need to choose academic

courses

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high level.

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people

think that academic

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, some parents not helping their kids to go to the

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training

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before they go to

university

school

because they think it is wasting their time and money.

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usually

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Coherence and Cohesion

Begin with a clear thesis statement outlining your position on the topic. Make sure each paragraph develops only one main idea. Link your paragraphs and ideas with appropriate cohesion devices. You should also aim to eliminate repetition and ensure the essay flows well.

Task Achievement

Address all parts of the task and present a clear opinion throughout the essay. Ensure your ideas are developed and explained well.

Task Achievement

Provide specific examples and details in your support. Avoid vague explanations and enhance detail where possible.

Task Achievement

Attempts to address the topic with an introduction and conclusion. Shows understanding of the importance of an academic education before university.

Coherence and Cohesion

The essay is structured with an introduction, at least two body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

272 words

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