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Percentage of households with electrical appliances (1920-2019) Percentage of household‹ 100 90 oo o g o o 1920 1940 1960 1980 2000 2019 Year - Washing machine - Refrigerator -- Vacuum cleaner Number of hours of housework per week, per household (1920 - 2019) Number of hours per week 50 40 상병 10 1920 1940 1960 Year - Hours per week 1980 2000 2019

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The charts demonstrate how people changed the electrical appliances they possess, and how much time they spent on the residences they lived in a country over the period of 99 years.
Overall
, it is apparent that all three
hosehold
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household
 devices were in the upward trend,
while
 refrigerators and vacuum cleaners were the major ones people were likely to own.
Moreover
, people used to spend more time on
housechores
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house chores
in
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at
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 the beginning of the term
rathen
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rather
 than
in
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 the end.
First,
inspite
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in spite
 of the fact that fridges were not almost purchased by dwellers in 1920, the percentage of them raised significantly in 1940 to over 50
percent
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. It followed by a reasonable increase by 1980 which remained stable until 2019 the trend for which was the same with that of vacuum cleaners.
Furthermore
, the purchase of
wasching
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washing
 machines doubled notably by almost 40
percent
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 in 2019, with slight ups and downs though. Turning to the
hours
 spent on housework, it is clearly seen that residents would do more chores in 1920 in a week (50
hours
), which
lessenned
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lessened
 crucially by 30
hours
 in 1960. In 1960 that number declined by approximately 5
hours
, despite the stable condition in the following 20 years. Time allocated to domestic chores saw a moderate decline to 10
hours
 in 2019.
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coherence cohesion
Try to clearly define the key points of each chart separately before making comparative statements. This could enhance clarity and focus.
task achievement
Ensure all details are summarized adequately, especially when discussing numerical data and trends to cover all necessary aspects.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction gives a good overview of the data trends, mentioning key patterns and differences over time.
introduction conclusion present
A clear concluding sentence that summarizes the main trends observed in the data is present.

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