In some countries owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Many

people

renting

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rent

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apartment

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apartments

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home

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homes

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rather than owning a

house

in several countries. Because buying a

house

is much more expensive than renting a

home

. And

this

is a good choice for everyone. In

this

essay I will discuss

about

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most of the

people

rent

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who rent

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home

and what kind of

situation

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situations

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they

created

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. Not everyone can afford a

house

in a modern city

due to

it's

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its

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over price.

Some

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In some

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modern

country's

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countries

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cities

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much more expensive than downtown apartments,

also

regarding the tax issue when

people

want to buy a

house

they

has

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to count so much money for that and they

has

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have

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to pay

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apply

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the government which is tax.

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, many individuals in the UK can not buy an apartment because of higher tax

rate

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rates

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. If they buy a

house

then

they have to pay every year more than half of its price.

On the other hand

, renting a

house

is better than

have

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having

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one because it

provides

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allows

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multiple

family

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families

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to stay

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one place.

This

is beneficial for our environment because not every country has big and wide land for everyone, if

people

use to live alone in

single

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the single

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home

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homes

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then

the government might face human trafficking,

that

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which

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means,

population

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the population

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will be higher than houses so many

people

will suffer

due to

less

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fewer

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lands for their

home

For instance

, in China,

there

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their

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citizen

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citizens

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can't own

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apply

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land or

house

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houses

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Therefore

, their

people

rent a

house

for living so that's how the Chinese government encountered the human trafficking problem. In conclusion,

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in A

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few countries

people

do not own

any

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house

for themselves because they believe that, renting a

home

better

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is better

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than having their own

house

Nevertheless

this

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also provides

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also

provides financial benefits and protects from human trafficking.

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Try to link your ideas more effectively throughout the essay. Use transition words and phrases to guide the reader through your arguments smoothly.

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Make sure to address the topic questions fully and clearly. While you discuss reasons for renting, ensure that the why behind owning homes being important is also clear.

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The essay introduces the topic and attempts to discuss the reasons why some people may prefer renting over owning a home.

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The essay tries to tackle both questions posed in the prompt, attempting to discuss whether this is a positive or negative situation.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

292 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

ownership
renting
importance
sense of security
stability
financial investment
asset
customize
decorate
belonging
community
potential
future generations
long-term
cost advantage
control
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