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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the statistics of a survey about how individuals in five different Australian cities bought
as well as
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 consumed
coffee
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 and
tea
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 regularly.
Overall
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,
mostly
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most
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people
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were gone
Wrong verb form
go
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for
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to
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 a cafe to drink
tea
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 or
coffee
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 in every city
provided
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apply
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.
Whereas
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, in every city,
people
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 were less interested
to buy
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in buying
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 fresh
coffee
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. The highest
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coffee
Correct quantifier usage
number of coffee
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 and
tea
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 consumed from a cafe in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks were
Melbourne
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in Melbourne
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 around 64% of
people
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, Hobart about 63% and Sydney just 60%
moreover
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, Brisbane and Adelaide
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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approximately (55-50% respectively).
People
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 in every city
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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used to go to
cafe
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cafes
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 for their
coffee
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 or
tea
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.
On the other hand
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, buying instant
coffee
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 was
significant
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more significant
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 than fresh
coffee
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in
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apply
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last
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 week. Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart
there
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their
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 consumption were around(45%, 47%, 52%, 50% and 54% sequentially)
while
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, bought fresh
coffee
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 were (44%, 43%, 34%, 34% and 37% chronologically) which was the lowest consumed buying
coffee
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 ever.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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