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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Both maps illustrate an island,earlier and later the building of
same
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the same
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 tourist conveniences.
Overall
, the two maps
presents
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present
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 some changes in the isle before and after for tourists. Over the period ,the isle was completely transformed with the addition of a hotel and pier ,
nevertheless
,there
is
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are
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 no changes in the east part of
this
 island. The Island was empty before the construction
except
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except for
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 palms.First thing
first,
the houses were built for
recreation
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the recreation
a recreation
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 area.
This
 area
surrounded
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is surrounded
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 by
ocean
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an ocean
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 and has
beach
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a beach
the beach
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 to the west. The pier was demolished over two ships
in
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on
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 two sides. Following that the reception
has
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was
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 built near the residential building and opposite the reception there is a restaurant.
Subsequently
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Subsequently,
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this
 area is ready for
tourists
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tourist
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 attendance.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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