The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.

The pie charts below show the devices people in the 18 to 25 age group use to watch television in Canada in two different years.
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Two circle diagrams present the personal devices of people aged 18 to 25 that have been used to watch
TV
programs in Canada between 2009 and 2019.
Overall
,
It is clear that
from two years of given data, the technology has shifted a lot between traditional
TV
and flat-screen
TV
, as mobile phones and tablets
also
increased in the later given year.
Moreover
, the size of personal equipment that gained more proportion is smaller. In 2009 information, the greatest ratio of
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34% of the total.
While
in 2019, the old-fashioned
TV
rate dropped to 4%. Meanwhile, desktop computers are relatively similar between 2009 and 2019, 18% and 12% respectively. Mobile phones and tablets are a major change in the year 2019, increasing sharply, both are small gadgets.
In addition
, laptops have retained their popularity during 2009 and 2019, sequencely at 15% and 20%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie charts
  • 18 to 25 age group
  • devices
  • watch television
  • Canada
  • comparison
  • shift
  • preferences
  • mobile devices
  • traditional televisions
  • technological advancements
  • television viewing habits
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