The pie charts below show the selected causes of death as a percentage of all deaths of registered Indians and the total population in 1992.

The pie charts below show the selected causes of death as a percentage of all deaths of registered Indians and the total population in 1992.
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The chart provides information about the reasons for
death
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in India in 1992.
Overall
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, it is evident that the bigger causes were accidents and other factors,
whereas
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the lower ones were heart disease and cancer. Looking in more detail, the accident was the highest percentage of causes of
death
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at around 44%.
In addition
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, people died from other factors which comprised about 26.4%.
However
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, homicide was significantly low in terms of the reasons for
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, it accounted for approximately 14%. With regard to the remaining causes, suicide was
also
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a mortality reason in India, which took up about 8.1%.
In addition
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, cancer deaths made up almost 5.3% in 1992.
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, cardiovascular diseases were the least
death
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reason which comprised about 2%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words death with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographics
  • mortality rates
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • neoplasms (cancers)
  • chronic diseases
  • infectious diseases
  • statistical significance
  • preventable causes
  • health disparities
  • lifestyle factors
  • epidemiological data
  • public health
  • socioeconomic factors
  • medical conditions
  • healthcare access
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