There are some violent cartoon characters on Tv such as Mickey mouse, which bring negative influence to children. Do you agree or disagree? What types of TV programs are suitable for children
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To improve coherence, focus on creating clearer connections between your points and arguments. Use linking words and phrases to better guide the reader through your argument.
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Be sure to clarify and flesh out your examples more fully to ensure they are directly related to your main points and argument. This will help the reader understand how they support your stance.
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task achievement
Your essay presents a clear position on the topic and provides a thoughtful comparison between past and current animation shows, with examples.
coherence cohesion
The essay includes both an introduction and conclusion, summarizing your viewpoints effectively. This provides a well-rounded view for the reader.
task achievement
You effectively contrast examples of animations to illustrate your opinion, showing critical thinking.
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