The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph compares the participation rate of 5 activity clubs in Melbourne,Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Although
there were variations,
overall
,
it is clear that
people
in Melbourne are more interested in watching films than other activities.
Additionally
, members of Table tennis and Musical performances moved up. At the outset,if 65
people
keened on movies in 2000,
although
falling in 2010 (60
participants
), the group recovered to 67 in 2020.
Moreover
,Martial arts had approximately 38
participants
in 2000,and it mirrored the film club's way with 38
people
in 2020.
However
, Table tennis was in the fourth stage with under 20 delegates in 2000,and after slightly increasing to 20 in 2010 it came to the same level as Amateur dramatics,and after sharply growing
this
group was in second place with over 50 humans.
Furthermore
, locals in the city did not give interest in musical instruments till 2005,and its members numbers went up continually, and they had 20
people
in 2020.
Nonetheless
, if Amateur
Drammatics
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Dramatics
had 25
participants
in 2000,in spite of it
grew
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growing
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to 30 after five years,after a sharp fall they had only 8
participants
in 2020.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, participants with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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