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The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph shows
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the
number
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 of
participants
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 for
entertements
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entertainment
activities
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 in Melbourne,Australia
between
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 2000 and 2020.
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, the different
activities
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 at one social centre in Melbourne
different
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show different
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 trends in the time period.People more interested went to
film
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the film
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 club over
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time. As the graph shows,Melbourne people
more
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 interested
film
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in film
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clubs
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club
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club,
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 started at to around 65
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number of
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participents
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participants
 in 2000,but
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figure
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was
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increased
around
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 70 in 2020.
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activities
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activity
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table
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tennis
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tennis,
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 started
at
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 15
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number of
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participants
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 in 2000
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this
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figure
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 small increased to 20
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number of
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partipants
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participants
 in 2010, and in
2010
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2010,
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figure was
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number
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significant
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 increased
around
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 55 in 2020.The proportion for musical
performances
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performance
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activities
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 was 0
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number of
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participants
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 in 2005, but
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 proportion
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significant
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 increased
around
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 19
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number of
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participants
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 in 2020. 
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another
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other
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activities
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 amateur dramatics started
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 25
participants
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 in 2000
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this
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propotion
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proportion
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small
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inreased
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increased
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 30, but
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figure
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significant
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decreaced
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decreased
5
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participants
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 in 2020. The martial arts
activities
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 were in the first position around 38
participants
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 in 2000, but
this
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figure
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 was small decreased in 2005, and
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 proportion was slightly increased in 2005
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this
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figure
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 was decreased in 2020.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, participants, activities, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rates
  • trends
  • significant increases/decreases
  • stable numbers
  • fluctuations
  • overall participation
  • comparison
  • activities
  • social centre
  • Melbourne
  • participants
  • highlight
  • report
  • graph illustrates/demonstrates
  • 20-year period
  • key features
  • main features
  • statistical data
  • variations
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