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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The given graph illustrates the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and its present plan. 
Overall
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, all the stuff in the central library has been removed for 20 years, except the entrance and
adult
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fiction
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books
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.
However
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, the entrance was not changed, and the
adult
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fiction
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books
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 part was changed to a new place in the library.It is clearly seen that the children’s
books
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 were replaced by the lecture room on the top right-hand side.
Subsequently
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, the
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 non-
fiction
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books
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 part was replaced by
adult
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fiction
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books
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 that had been in the middle-right side 20 years before, and
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 it was replaced by an information desk and self-service machines.
Although
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 the enquiry desk (tickets, book returns, etc.) was changed to a café on the down-right border.
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, the entrance was kept untouched on the bottom part.It is obvious that the reading room (newspaper and magazine) was replaced by a computer room on the left downside.
Then
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, the
adult
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fiction
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books
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 section was removed, and all reference
books
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 were placed in the middle left border.
Furthermore
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, the CDs, videos, and computer games were removed, and sofas, storytelling events, and children’s
fiction
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books
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 were placed on the right
upside
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words adult, fiction, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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