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The picture below shows the life cycle of the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram illustrates the stages of development that a
salmon
 passes through during its lifetime.
Overall
, it can be seen from the picture that there are four stages in
this
 process from the initial eggs to the final
adult
salmon
. First of all, the
adult
salmon
 lays its eggs in the upper slow-moving water. The spawn rests in the cover of reeds under the small stones. After that approximately five to six months later the eggs start to hatch and
fry
 are released. The
fry
 is between the length
3
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-8 cm. Unlike spawn,
fry
 lives in the lower fast-flowing water, which is
also
 called an Estuary.
Subsequently
,
fry
 turns into smolt after almost 4 years. Smolt are 12-15 cm long and they travel to the open sea where smolt
is
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are
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 converted to
adult
salmon
 after nearly 5 years.
Finally
, the
adult
salmon
 are the longest among all stages and the length is from 70-76 cm.
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coherence cohesion
Enhance the use of linking words and phrases to improve the structural flow of the essay. This will enhance coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Provide more specific comparisons or highlight differences between stages where relevant to strengthen task achievement.
task achievement
The essay clearly outlines the main stages of the salmon life cycle, showing a good overall understanding of the task.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clearly present and effectively summarize the stages of the salmon life cycle.
coherence cohesion
Main points are logically presented, making it easy for the reader to follow the progression of the life cycle.

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