The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts
illustrates
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illustrate
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how
amount
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the amount
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of money spent
to
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on
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housing,
food
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, health care, education, transportation and others in a country from 1950 to 2010.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of housing in 1950 was
highest
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higher
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than other households.
While
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in 2010, the proportion of housing and education decreased,
while
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other figures increased,
food
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takes
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took
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the largest part in 2010.
To begin
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, in 1950, the expenditures
of
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on
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housing
reaching
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reached
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a peak at 72.1%,
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in 2010, dropped to 22%.
Furthermore
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, in 1950, the amount of money spent
for
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on
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food
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and health care
were
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was
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11.2% and 2.4 % respectively.
then
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it is growth reaching a peak at 34% for
food
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and 4.5% for health care by 2010.
In contrast
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, the
percertage
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percentage
of education was 6.6% in 1950,
then
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slightly dropped to 6.3% by 2010.
Moreover
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, in 1950, the average of transportation and Other were 3.3% and 4.4% respectively.
However
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, in 2010, the transportation rose to 14% and 19.2% for others .

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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