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Nowadays, the use of animal testing in medical research has become a hot topic. Some people believe that animal testing should be banned, whereas others claim it is necessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Animal testing has become a considerable debate
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these days. Some people argue that
trials
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 using
animals
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 for research ought to be banned,
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 others think that the
trials
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 are required.
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 banning animal testing
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 the rights of the testing
animals
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, I believe that it is essential to test various
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 before reaching humans. On the one hand, those who support the idea of banning
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animal testing say that all species have
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 to live. Most of the
animals
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use
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for
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 medical researchers are closely related to humans
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 as monkeys and chimpanzees and they have
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 to live
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unharmed.
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, a
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survey
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activities
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 revealed that 55% of ordinary people who live in America proposed to ban animal testing in the labs.
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, I believe that
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animal testing is
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 essential part
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the drugs
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drugs
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develop
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 process.
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, the advocates of the view that animal testing in
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 field is necessary
believe
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 that without animal
trials
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scients
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scientists
 would not achieve the best results from their studies, especially drug
trials
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 tests allow them to
identiy
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identify
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 effects of the
drugs
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 and they can change the
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formula
 of it.
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, before a drug
come
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 to market it
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mandetory
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mandatory
 to be trialed against
animal
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animals
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 which reveals
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animal testing. I believe,
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 testing help to
scientist
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scientists
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 to create better medicines for human beings. In conclusion,
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the
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lab testing using
animals
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violet
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violates
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 their rights, animal testing
necessary
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is necessary
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 to produce better
drugs
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 for humans. I believe that these
testing
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tests
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 need to identify and cure disease.

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task achievement
Your essay provides a well-developed response to the task with clear viewpoints on both sides of the argument regarding animal testing. To further enhance your essay, consider expanding the supporting details for both views. Include more comprehensive arguments and examples that provide deeper insights into the benefits and drawbacks of animal testing.
coherence cohesion
While your essay is generally coherent, improving the logical flow between sentences and ideas would make it stronger. Use transitional phrases to better connect your points and to lead the reader more smoothly from one argument to the next. This will enhance the essay’s readability and clarity.
task achievement
You've clearly outlined the controversial nature of animal testing and provided a balanced discussion by addressing both views before stating your own opinion.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, providing a complete structure to your response. This helps the reader follow your arguments effectively.
coherence cohesion
The main points of your arguments are supported with relevant examples, which strengthens the points you are making.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • morally wrong
  • ethical considerations
  • animal rights
  • exploited
  • in vitro testing
  • computer modeling
  • human-patient simulators
  • life-saving treatments
  • stricter regulations
  • minimize
  • humanely
  • biological differences
  • predict human outcomes
  • economic implications
  • cost-efficient
  • medical advancements
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