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The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The graph below shows the differences in wheat exports over three different areas. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph presents
wheat
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exports
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 between 1985-1990
over
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 three different
countries
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.
Overall
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, the
wheat
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export
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exports
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 in Canada and European
countries
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 went up,
whereas
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 the
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export
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exports
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 in Australia fell over time. As a graph shows, Australia’s
wheat
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 was 15 in 1985
then
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 the figure increased to approximately 16.
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,
the
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Australia’s
wheat
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export
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exports
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 plummet slowly until 1990 to 11
million
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tons
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. Regarding
to
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Canada’s
wheat
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export
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 in 1985 was around 19, but it dropped to 17
million
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tons
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 in 1986.
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,
exports
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 number increased sharply to
until
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25
million
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tons
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 in 1988.
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, the figure went down quickly to approximately 14
million
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tons
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 in 1989 and in 1990 increased to 19
million
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tons
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.
By contrast
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, the
wheat
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exports
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 in European
countries
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was
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 around 15 and 20
million
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tons
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 in 1985,
then
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 in 1896 the number decreased to 14
million
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 and in 1897 went up slowly to 15
millions
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million
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.
Then
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, in 1898 the figure did not
changed
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, but the number of
wheat
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exports
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 in European
countries
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 increased steadily until 1990 to 21
million
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tons
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, exports, countries, export, million, tons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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