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There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and Present.

There 2 maps of Paradise Island in the past and Present.
The diagrams
shows
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 how Paradise
Island
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 has changed from the past to the present.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the
Island
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 has undergone significant transformations.
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While in
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In
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 the past the
island
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 which
located
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was located
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 in the middle of the map the construction of scientific research was replaced
to
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with
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 recreational zones. For more illustration, in the past
beach
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beaches
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 and
pier
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piers
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,
also
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boat
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boats
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 were located
in
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apply
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the
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apply
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northwest of the map, in the middle
whuch
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which
 placed scientific research
station
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stations
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as well as
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natural
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a natural
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spring
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springs
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.
In addition
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,
in
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on
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northeastern
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the northeastern
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 side were located rocks.
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, locations significantly changed to commercial establishments. In the southeast
site
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side
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 of the map which located natural
Spring
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Springs
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 and
greenary
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greenery
area
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areas
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knocked
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were knocked
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 down to make restaurants , BBQ
area
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areas
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as well
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as
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a
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 cafe centre .
However
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 ,
natural
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the natural
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Spring
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Springs
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 extended with scenic
lookout
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lookouts
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 for visitors. At the bottom of the
constructions
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construction
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 was built
cycle
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a cycle
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 path for vehicles. Turning to the part of the
Island
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that placed
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where the
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 science centre was demolished to make
swimming
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a swimming
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 pool near the Hotel complex.
Furthermore
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,
pier
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the pier
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 and boat
which
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apply
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situated western side of
the
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apply
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Paradise
Island
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was
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were
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 extended with new opportunities for ships and
was
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apply
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built new cruise
ship
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ships
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 respectively.
Moreover
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 ,
in
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apply
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the beach
that
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positioned in the north
also
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 permitted to swim for people who came to Paradise.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, as well as".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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