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Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is often seen that online purchasing, especially books, air tickets or various goods, is trending more popular now.
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this
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 has drawbacks
such
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people
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 prone to scams, I believe that there are more advantages
becasuse
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because
 it saves a
lots
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 of
time
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. The main reason
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concern
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 of online shopping is that customers may get caught
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 scams. The reason for
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 is that buyers are unable to distinguish the
legitiment
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legitimate
 sales and fake sales. Most of the
time
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 the consumers unintentionally lure to some online sales items which have unbelievable price tags.
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, a survey conducted by National Australian Bank revealed that 56% of account holders have complained that they caught
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various
 online scams.
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, I believe that if the
customers
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 careful handling the online purchases, they can mitigate the risk of scamming.
On the other hand
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, saving
time
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 is the top advantage of online buying because the buyers do not want to attend physically
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 to purchase the items and less waiting
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 for delivery
encourage
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encourages
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people
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 to engage with more online buying.
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, Kmart in Australia stated that their online sale increased
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% in Chrismas
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,
thus
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people
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 prefer online service.
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, most
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apply
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the
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apply
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online businesses provide
free
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a free
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 return policy, if the customer is not happy with their product. So,
people
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 prefer buying things from
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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,
it
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as it
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more
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is more
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 convenient than attending the store. In conclusion,
although
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 online shopping has drawbacks
such
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 as
scaming
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scamming
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 issues, I believe that reducing
time
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 waste and
facility
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the facility
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of
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to
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 return goods outweigh the drawbacks of online purchases.

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task achievement
Incorporate more examples and explanations to support each point clearly.
language accuracy
Be mindful of grammar and spelling to enhance clarity and professionalism, such as 'legitiment' should be 'legitimate' and 'concern' instead of 'concer'.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively summarize the main points.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced view by addressing both advantages and disadvantages.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • product selection
  • geographic limitations
  • price comparisons
  • physical inspection
  • customer satisfaction
  • delivery delay
  • online fraud
  • scams
  • trusted websites
  • notable disadvantages
  • increasingly popular
  • beneficial method
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