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Write about the following topic. Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is becoming more and more popular. Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is often seen that online purchasing, especially books, air tickets or various goods, is trending more popular now.
Although
this
 has drawbacks
such
 as
people
 prone to scams, I believe that there are more advantages
becasuse
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because
 it saves a
lots
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lot
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 of
time
. The main reason
concer
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concern
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 of online shopping is that customers may get caught
to
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in
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 scams. The reason for
this
 is that buyers are unable to distinguish the
legitiment
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legitimate
 sales and fake sales. Most of the
time
 the consumers unintentionally lure to some online sales items which have unbelievable price tags.
For example
, a survey conducted by National Australian Bank revealed that 56% of account holders have complained that they caught
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vairous
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various
 online scams.
However
, I believe that if the
customers
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 careful handling the online purchases, they can mitigate the risk of scamming.
On the other hand
, saving
time
 is the top advantage of online buying because the buyers do not want to attend physically
in store
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 to purchase the items and less waiting
time
 for delivery
encourage
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people
 to engage with more online buying.
For instance
, Kmart in Australia stated that their online sale increased
65
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% in Chrismas
time
,
thus
people
 prefer online service.
Additionally
, most
of
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the
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online businesses provide
free
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a free
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 return policy, if the customer is not happy with their product. So,
people
 prefer buying things from
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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,
it
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as it
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more
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is more
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 convenient than attending the store. In conclusion,
although
 online shopping has drawbacks
such
 as
scaming
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scamming
scaling
 issues, I believe that reducing
time
 waste and
facility
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the facility
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of
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to
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 return goods outweigh the drawbacks of online purchases.
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task achievement
Incorporate more examples and explanations to support each point clearly.
language accuracy
Be mindful of grammar and spelling to enhance clarity and professionalism, such as 'legitiment' should be 'legitimate' and 'concern' instead of 'concer'.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are clear and effectively summarize the main points.
task achievement
The essay provides a balanced view by addressing both advantages and disadvantages.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • product selection
  • geographic limitations
  • price comparisons
  • physical inspection
  • customer satisfaction
  • delivery delay
  • online fraud
  • scams
  • trusted websites
  • notable disadvantages
  • increasingly popular
  • beneficial method
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