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The graph below shows the averate growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The graph below shows the averate growth in domestic products in wealthy countries, countries that have adopted a global approach to business and countries that have not. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The line
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graph
 illustrates the moderate growth in wealthy countries,
globalisers
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globalised
 and
non-globalisers
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non-globalised
 in domestic goods
during
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many times.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 wealthy countries and
non-globalisers
 decreased over time.
Although
non-globalisers
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non-globalised
 plummeted, it had
been fluctuated
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, and in
1970s
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, it was
in
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 the highest level. But
globalisers
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globalised
globalists
 had
steadily
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 growth.
Firstly
, wealthy countries
was
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 at nearly between 4 per
cent
 and 5 per
cent
 , in
1960s
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.
Overtime
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, it decreased to around 3 per
cent
 and above 2 per
cent
 in
1970s
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the 1970s
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 and 1980s, respectively.
At
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 the end, it reached
to
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2 per
cent
 in the latest year.
Non-globalisers
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Non-globalised
 not only did it fall, but
also
 it fluctuated.
First,
it was at nearly 2.5 per
cent
, over time, it
has
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rocketed in 1970, but it dramatically dropped to approximately 1 per
cent
.
In
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 the end of the period, it reached
to
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1.5 per
cent
, in 1990.
by contrast
, we are witness
thst
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that
 the
globalisers
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globalists
globalised
 had been at just under 5 per
cent
, the highest level compared to others, in
1990s
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the 1990s
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.
First,
in 19960s, it was at 1.5 per
cent
. Over time, it reached
to
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just under 3 per
cent
 and it
countinued
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continued
continues
 in
1980s
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the 1980s
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encreacing
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increasing
trend
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the trend
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.
Therefore
, it climbed at
approximatly
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approximately
 5 per
cent
.
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