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What factors should students consider when deciding between studying abroad or in their home country, according to the essay?

In my opinion,
study
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 abroad and
study
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at
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in
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 our own home
county
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country
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start
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from
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what
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apply
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the
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student
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 purpose. The degree practically. Does the
student
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 want to career in multinational companies or national after
graduate
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.
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course
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 don't forget about each difference of curriculum and syllabus at each institution country. In my conclusion, ask what the
student
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 needs in the future degree to know what and where
is
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to study abroad or home country. Do research does the institution in your own home country
does
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have a good academic ranking and innovative research
.
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, compare it with curriculum and lecturer abroad, and choose what the
student
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 needs critically
to
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for
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 their future

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task achievement
The writer identifies important factors like career aspirations and institutional rankings, which are relevant to the decision-making process between studying abroad and studying at home.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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