The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts below illustrate the changes in the ratio of yielded
energy
in a particular area between 1983 and 2003.
Overall
, we can see that the major produced
energy
in the whole given period is oil,
whereas
the least manufactured one is the hydropower
energy
source which has not changed over 20 years.
To begin
with, oil took 42% of all sources in 1983, meantime the hydropower
energy
consisted of only 4%.
Then
, in 2003, we can notice that there has not been either improvement or decrease in terms of hydropower, unlike oil's proportion which decreased by 4%. Regarding other energetical products, it is noticeable that the production of natural gas over the given time has increased significantly from just 11% to 21%, and nuclear power
also
experienced a rise from 20% to 24% at the same time.
Although
the ratio of coal sources in 1983 was approximately
quarter
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a quarter
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of the whole produced
enegretical
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energetical
energetic
resources, it
has
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declined by 10% in the next 20 years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportions
  • energy sources
  • increases
  • decreases
  • trends
  • analysis
  • significant
  • compare
  • changes over time
  • introduction
  • phase out
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