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SOME THINK THAT POLITICIANS SHOULD ALWAYS BE HONEST WEHILE OTHERS FEEL THAT THERE ARE TIMES WHEN THEY MUST LIE. DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS AND YOUR OPINION.

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It is important to have government legislators to run a nation. A handful of
people
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 think that honesty should always be presented by politicians,
while
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 others opine that they have to lie in some cases. In my opinion, it relies on situations, but
law
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 should not
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deal with human emotions.
This
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To begin
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reasons why
government
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the government
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 ought to continuously be honest.
Firstly
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, citizens have plenty of expectations from their authorities. To be more precise, if leaders are hiding something
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public
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the public
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 will not
truest
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trust
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 them.
Consequently
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, they will not win their next elections
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 their misrepresentation of plans and thoughts.
Moreover
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, every lawmaker should not
do
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 fake promises.
For instance
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, an MLA of Ropar Village always committed those pledges which he
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fulfill
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. He was the
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 Chief Minister in Raipur.
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, because of the blind trust that
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 have
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 government is the prime reason for not presenting any false
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 or policies.
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,
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 who
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 another
view point
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viewpoint
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 say that lying is sometimes
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good for the betterment of individuals.
In other words
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, leaders have to speak a lie in some circumstances where they
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 a threat
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public
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 from
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.
As a result
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, there will be a risk for their folks which they want to protect them from other party’s misconceptions.
In addition
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, there are
sometimes
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times
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 when individuals do not want to hear any news which makes them uncomfortable. To exemplify,
administration
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the administration
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 announced the prohibition of alcohol but still liquors are sold through other
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.
Hence
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, it is better for politicians to tell a lie as it makes
people
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 comfortable than
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 truth.
To conclude
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, after analyzing both views, it is not hard to see that legislators have to be genuine
as well as
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 must be
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 for
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’s
benefits
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. In my viewpoint, honesty is not always the best policy because sometimes situations demand not to speak
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 truth.
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task achievement
Ensure to fully elaborate on both views with balanced arguments, providing more specific examples to enhance understanding.
task achievement
Clarify your opinion earlier in the essay and align it consistently with the discussion.
coherence cohesion
Ensure logical transitions between ideas to improve flow.
coherence cohesion
Develop the conclusion to offer more comprehensive closure, restating both the discussed views and your opinion.
task achievement
The essay addresses both sides of the argument, which is an essential part of answering the question appropriately.
coherence cohesion
Introduction and conclusion are present, framing the discussion well.
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