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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
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The bar graphs
illutrastes
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illustrate
 estimated world
illiteracy
 rates by region and by gender for the
last
 year. The figures are given in percentages.
Overall
, it can be seen that the number of
women
 had upward trends. Looking first at the estimated global
illiteracy
 numbers were under 20,
male
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males
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 who lived in developed
conutries
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countries
 had the lowest rates, which was almost the same as
women
 in those
conuntries
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countries
.
In contrast
, the percentage
for
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of
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women
 in Latin
American
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America
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 and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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 were
higer
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higher
 than
men
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for men
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. At the same time, East Asia and Oceania
male
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males
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 were almost twice times as high as
women
. Moving on to the percentage of worldwide
illiteracy
were
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was
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 above 20,
women
whi
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who
 live in South Asia had the
higest
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highest
illiteracy
percentages
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percentage
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. At the same time, the figure of
women
for
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in
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 Sub-Saharan Africa, Arab States, and South Asia were higher than
male
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males
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 in that
conuntries
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countries
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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