The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.

The maps illustrate an industrial area in Norbiton in the present day compared with plans for future development of the site.
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The portraits below display a factory district and future construction plans for the area, located in Norbiton.
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, the town’s developments will create a more peaceful living environment by replacing industrial buildings with residential areas and essential amenities for citizens to live and thrive The town is located connected to a main highway that passes by. A river
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flows by in the northern area. Across it is vast farmland. A roundabout has
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been developed exactly in the middle. Plannings showcased a complete transformation of the industrial sector to a more hospitable suburb. The most noticeable changes that will happen are the demolition of 8 factories that once filled the entire site and
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replacement with housing and other facilities
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as shops and a medical centre at the centre of the town;
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a school and a playground towards the eastern side. There will be a total of 7 new houses scattered around the land; 3 towards the east side, 3
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the north-western side, and 1 built across the river that could be accessed by a bridge that will
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be erected later on. Roads will be extended to allow connection to the newly constructed houses. A smaller roundabout will be established at the bottom of the previously built one, connecting to the main roadway.
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