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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagrams illustrate the changes that have taken place in Porth Harbour between 2000 and today. In
generall
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general
, there were some minor improvements and some buildings and areas have been repurposed. To start with, in the north
part
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map
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 another dock has been built next to the previous one.
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in the western
part
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map
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 the
location
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 for private
yatchs
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yachts
 and fishing boats have switched with each other. As regards
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the western
part
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map
 where the car park is located, it can be seen that an entrance has been built for
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 park from the Main road and the previous one has
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Following
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, a place for showers and toilets has been constructed
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north of the car park. Looking at the
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other
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, there was a disused castle which the building
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 been converted
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 a hotel and a road
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 been built to connect the hotel to the road.
Also
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 a cafe has been built in the western area near the water and the place for
lifeboat
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a lifeboat
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coherence cohesion
To further improve clarity, make sure your descriptions are straightforward and easy to follow. Try to describe changes in a logical order to enhance coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
Focus on providing a clear overview of the main features of the diagram. This can help enhance the task achievement score by displaying a comprehensive understanding.
task achievement
The essay effectively compares the key changes in the harbour from 2000 to today, fulfilling the task requirement by summarizing and selecting relevant features.
coherence cohesion
The essay maintains a logical flow of ideas with separate paragraphs focusing on different parts of the harbour, which contributes positively to the coherence and cohesion of the essay.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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