Some people think that technology development decreases crime, while others believe it actually encourages crimes. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is
technology
development and their
effect Correct pronoun usage
its
in
Change preposition
on
the
Correct article usage
apply
crime
. It is undeniable that technology
has become an essential part in
our life. Change preposition
of
This
essay Change preposition
In this
i
will Change the capitalization
I
discuses
how Correct your spelling
discuss
technology
changes Correct article usage
the population
population
mind and give Change noun form
population's
own
opinion.
Correct pronoun usage
my own
Firstly
, There are many reasons why population
think that Correct article usage
the population
technology
development decrease
Change the verb form
decreases
crime
.The main one is now the increasing ability of technology
to reduce crime
, which we can see in the news, on television and on the Internet, there is a lot of evidence that crime
is significantly reduced. In addition
, modern technologies help reduce the number of new crimes
, and the government is trying to save time to solve crimes
, using technology
for this
. A hundred yeers
ago when Correct your spelling
years
technology
did not develop, such
as present
, many Correct article usage
the present
crimes
had
not discovered. Verb problem
were
However
, the
Change preposition
in the
21
century gratitude for Correct your spelling
21st
develop
Wrong verb form
developed
technology
many crime
decreased and Change to a plural noun
crimes
lead
to life Wrong verb form
led
a
peace.
The main of them nowadays increasing Correct article usage
apply
technology
abilities that we can obverse
on the news, on TV and on the internet Correct your spelling
observe
for
decrease Change preposition
to
crime
to evidence, which crime
drops significantly. Moreover
, modern technology
lead
more Correct subject-verb agreement
leads
achieve
to Replace the word
achievement
encouraged
new Wrong verb form
encourage
crimes
, also
government
Add an article
the government
for
Change preposition
to
discover
Change the verb form
discovering
crimes
should Change the verb form
be preserved
preserved
Wrong verb form
preserve
a
time. A hundred Correct article usage
apply
yeers
ago when Correct your spelling
years
technology
did not develop, such
as present
, many Correct article usage
the present
crimes
had
not discovered. Verb problem
were
However
, the
Change preposition
in the
21
century gratitude for Correct your spelling
21st
develop
Wrong verb form
developed
technology
many crime
decreased and Change to a plural noun
crimes
lead
to life Wrong verb form
led
a
peace.
In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say using Correct article usage
apply
develop
Wrong verb form
developed
technology
more advantage
than drawbacks. Fix the agreement mistake
advantages
Develop
Wrong verb form
Developing
technology
is more helpful in
anywhere around the world, People can commit a Change preposition
apply
crime
, without using technology
. We should teach them,
Correct word choice
that, consequence
Add an article
a consequence
the consequence
consequence
of Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
crime
never finished
Verb problem
come to
a
excellent end.Change the article
an
Submitted by dnm.best on
Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
Task Response
The essay attempts to address both sides of the argument and provides an opinion as required by the task. However, more detailed discussion and balance between the views are needed.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on structuring your ideas more clearly with distinct paragraphs for each point discussed. This will improve the logical flow of your essay.
Task Response
You have effectively identified the task requirements by discussing both views and giving your opinion.
Coherence and Cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and relate to the topic.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.
‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.
Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.