The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

The line chart illustrates the changes of cost black,white and colour

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TVs

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in Jabnes

yen

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during the period between 1953 and 1973.

It is clear that

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black and white

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was

upward

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an upward

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trend

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that time.

Whereas

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,Colour

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was a downward trend over the period.

To begin

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with,white and black

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TVs

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stood at 100.000

yen

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by 1953.After that,there

are

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a significant decrease in the cost in the next years.Throughout the period from 1963 and 1973,there was a stable change in the price

and

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apply

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reached

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reaching

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approximately 30

yen

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in 1973.On

other

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the other

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hand,colour

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reached a peak at 1953 account by around 180

yen

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Then

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there was a slight drop

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exactly 140

yen

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in 1963.After

which

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this

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, the figure declined dramatically and reached around 100

yen

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in 1973.

Monthely

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Monthly

salary average started

with

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almost 30

yen

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.The number rose gradually in the next time.It reached

the

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its

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highest point in 1973 at close to 180

yen

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Dec 2, 2024

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tv, yen with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 4 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

150 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Average monthly salary
Black and white TV
Colour TV
Japanese Yen
Affordability
Upward/downward trend
Technological advancements
Consumer preferences
Price dynamics
Market changes
Increase/decrease
Ratio
Introduction
Compare/contrast

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The graph below shows the average monthly salary and the prices of black and white and colour TV in Japanese yen from 1953 to 1973.

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