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The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000.

The graph below shows the spending on research into renewable sources of energy in four countries between 1975 and 2000.
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The given chart illustrates how much people spent on research into renewable energy in four nations during the period from 1975 to 2000. It is
clearly
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 that,
Spain
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 and Denmark
pay
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have paid
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 a lot of money in the
last
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years
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few years
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.The proportion increased gradually.
While
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both
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apply
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another countries
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another country
other countries
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 like
Spain
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 and
UK
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the UK
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 fluctuated through
the
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apply
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time.
To begin
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 with,Four countries stood at 50
dollars
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 in 1995.After that,Switzerland,Denmark and
Spain
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 increased rapidly
at
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to
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 around 51
dollars
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.There
are
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is
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 Fluctuation in the figure in
UK
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the UK
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.They reached
a
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 lowest point in 2000 by less than 50
dollars
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.
In addition
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,Spending on research in
Spain
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 fluctuated all the
period
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whole period
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 .In 2000,The number was approximately 50.5
dollars
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. On
other
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the other
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 hand,people in
Denemark
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Denmark
 spent more than 52
dollars
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 in 1980.The
persentage
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percentage
 grew suddenly to
reached
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reach
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 a peak at exactly 55
dollars
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 in 2000.
whereas
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Spain
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remain
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remains
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 unchanged
between
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for
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 over 10 years.
Then
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 the number
climbing
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climbed
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at
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to
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near
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nearly
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 53
dollars
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 in 1995.In 2000,The citizens
lay
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laid
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 out 35.5
dollars
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 on research.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words spain, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure patterns
  • Renewable energy research
  • Comparative analysis
  • Expenditure trends
  • Investment priorities
  • Global shifts
  • Economic capabilities
  • Innovation
  • Historical events
  • Policy changes
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