The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The bar chart provides key information about the average
number
of
hours
spent during a holiday in Greece by
tourists
from various countries. The units are measured by the
number
of
hours
.
Overall
it is clear from the graph that Chinese travellers
represent
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spend
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the highest
number
of
hours
in reading activity, but
clearly
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clearly,
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they
have
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spend
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the lowest
number
of
hours
on
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visiting places.
Whereas
, the majority of Brazilian and Turkish
tourists
prefer spending their time at the beach.
According to
the data shown, American
tourists
dedicate 5
hours
to reading books,
while
Chinese
tourists
had
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a significant 8
hours
.
However
, American
tourists
spend
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spent
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more time
with
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4
hours
compared to the Chinese who took 3
hours
only. In terms of Brazilian
tourists
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tourists,
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they devote 2
hours
only to visiting places,
while
American and Turkish
tourists
had
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have
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an equivalent
3
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of 3
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hours
. Brazilian
tourists
were at the beach for around 6
hours
;
however
, Turkish travellers spent 5
hours
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours, tourists with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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