The graph below shows the top priorities by business companies in the USA in 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the top priorities by business companies in the USA in 2016.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the top priorities of business companies in the USA in the year 2016.
Overall
, the majority of
employees
emphasized an
increase
in converting contacts/leads to
customers
and an
increase
in the
number
of contacts and details. Reducing the cost of
contact
/lead/customer acquisition was the lowest priority among all company
employees
. 26 to 200
employees
prioritised 79% to
increase
in
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the
number
of
contact
details
,
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while
prioritising 73% in converting
contact
leads to consumers.
Moreover
, 25
employees
prioritised 71% in converting
contact
leads to consumers and increasing the
number
of
contact
details. Meanwhile,
26
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to 200
employees
47 % prioritise increasing revenue derived from existing
customers
and providing the ROI of marketing activities.
However
, 201 or more
employees
prioritised 66% in converting
contact
leads to consumers and increasing the
number
of contacts and leads.
Furthermore
, 201 or more
employees
prioritised 55% to
increase
revenue derived
of
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existing
customers
. 25
employees
and 26 to 200
employees
emphasized 20% and 26% respectively in reducing the cost of
contact
/leads/
customers
.
Moreover
, 201
employees
30%
to
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prioritised reducing the cost of
contact
/leads/
customers
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, increase, customers, number, contact with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • top priority
  • business focus
  • percentage
  • comparison
  • significant gap
  • least prioritized
  • unique trends
  • surprising findings
  • industries
  • business objectives
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