The line graph shows the number oF serious crimes that occured in London between 2003 and 2012.

The line graph shows the number oF serious crimes that occured in London between 2003 and 2012.
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The line graph shows the
number
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oF
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of
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serious crimes that
occured
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occurred
in
London
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between 2003 and 2012. The given line chart illustrates the
number
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of heinous crimes (armed robbery, assault, and murder), which were occurred in
London
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from 2003 to 2012.
Overall
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, the
number
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of armed
robberies
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experienced a
decline
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,
while
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assaults
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showed an
increase
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.
Moreover
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, the
number
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of murders remained stable despite
some
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slight
increase
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. In 2004, there were 3700 armed
robberies
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occured
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occurred
in
London
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.
Then
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,
this
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crime showed a dramatic
decline
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and in 2008, around 1100
robberies
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occurred in
London
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.
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, from the year of 2009 to 2012, the
number
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of armed
robberies
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remained almost stable at 1500.
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, in 2003, around 2300
assaults
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happened in
London
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, and it showed a slight
decline
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in 2006, which was 2000.
Then
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, the
number
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of
assaults
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again showed an
increase
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of 2200 in 2007 followed by a
decline
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of 2000 in 2008.
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, the
number
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of
assaults
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started to rise after 2008 and reached 2700 in 2012. In terms of murder, in 2003, there were 500 murders were occurred, and in 2005, it increased slightly and reached 900 followed by a
decline
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of 600 in 2006 . In 2010, after a
decline
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of 500, murder experienced another
increase
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of 700.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, london, robberies, decline, assaults, increase with synonyms.
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