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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the number of houses by their annual salaries in three different years. Taking into account different
amount
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since
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from
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 less than 25.000
till
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to
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 more than 100.000. Comparing
among
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apply
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the years,
it is clear that
in
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2015 is higher than
previous
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in previous
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 years, increasing mainly
in
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to
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 100.000 or more.
On the other hand
, the range
25.000
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of 25.000
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 to 49.999 is
raising
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rising
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in a
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a
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the
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 long term
therefore
 in 2007
starts
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 with over 25
millions
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million
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 and
end
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 in 2015 with almost 30
millions
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million
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.
Finally
, the value between 50.000 to 99.999 is static
as a result
 it is observed more or less the same numbers of houses from 2007 to 2015.
Overall
, the chart
give
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 us relevant information about the economic situation taking into account
million
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millions
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 of homes in
US
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the US
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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