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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the number of
individuals
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 from five European countries who lived in each other's country in 2011
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, Out of 3 million and two hundred nighty eight residents, Most of them lived in
Germany
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,
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, the least of them were living in Polish in 2011 From the total of 1.198.000, most of the residents who lived in
Germany
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 in 2001 were Italian ,
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, Around one-fifth of the British
individuals
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 have been living in
Germany
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 in 2011
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, Poland had the minimum number of the total population who migrated from England,
Germany
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, Italy, and Spain. Only 170 of the Spanish
individuals
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 moved to Poland in 2011,
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 760 British members lived there in 2011 In conclusion,
Germany
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 seems to be the preferred and most occupied country by migratory
individuals
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 from England, Italy, Poland, and Spain in 2011
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words individuals, germany with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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