The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram shows the seven most important stages in
bees
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' honey-making process. The process begins with the
bees
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building a
hive
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and finishes when the honey is ready to be collected and used.
Firstly
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, the
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have to build a container.
This
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container is called a
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, and it consists of many individually built cells.
Next,
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the
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leave the
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to search for flowers. When they find a suitable flower, they collect the
nectar
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from it, which is used to make honey. The
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is
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taken back to the
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, where the production process can begin.
First,
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it is put into cells.
Then
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,
following
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this
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, the
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must be cooled down. In order to do
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, the
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fan the
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-filled cells with their wings.
As a result
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, the
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loses its water content, and
finally
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, honey is produced.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bees, hive, nectar with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Metamorphosis
  • Nectar
  • Foraging
  • Pollination
  • Worker bees
  • House bees
  • Honey stomach
  • Honeycomb cells
  • Beeswax
  • Evaporation
  • Hexagon-shaped
  • Simple sugars
  • Enzymes
  • Capping
  • Preserve
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