Some are of the opinion that attending a concert or an event in
person
is more exciting than watching Use synonyms
them
on TV. Correct pronoun usage
it
This
essay totally agrees with that statement because it provides an immersive environment and Linking Words
also
Linking Words
allow
Change the verb form
allows
people
to have good memories with their loved ones.
One of the main Use synonyms
benefit
of attending live concerts in Change to a plural noun
benefits
person
is the experience ones get when they attend them. Physical presence in the event is so exciting , and the adrenaline rush a Use synonyms
person
gets because of not knowing what will happen next during matches is so pleasurable. Use synonyms
That is
why Linking Words
besides
Linking Words
these kind
of programs charging so much money Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
people
still attend them. Use synonyms
For example
, on average an annual English Premier League pass Linking Words
cost
roughly 700 pounds, but Wrong verb form
costs
public
still Add an article
the public
buy
them and stadiums are usually full in Change the verb form
buys
majority
of games.
Another advantage that makes them more enjoyable is the time Add an article
the majority
a majority
spend
with family members. Change the form of the verb
spent
Majority
of the folks usually go to these events with their spouses or children. Correct article usage
The majority
This
results in Linking Words
family
coming closer to each other. Add an article
the family
For instance
, I still remember the first time when I went to see the cricket match between Pakistan and India, with my elder brother. I have lots of good memories from that day.
In conclusion, watching sports Linking Words
event
, Fix the agreement mistake
events
concert
or any performance in Fix the agreement mistake
concerts
person
is far more exciting and enjoyable because of Use synonyms
people
spending time with their families and how much they are invested in them. Use synonyms
Therfore
, it is recommended that Correct your spelling
Therefore
people
should attend them Use synonyms
atleast
once in their life with their Correct your spelling
at least
closed
ones.Correct word choice
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