You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. 

The following table shows the number of people from five European nations living in each other’s countries in 2011.

 You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the population of European immigrants living in other parts of the European Union in 2011.
Overall
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, Germany accepted the most foreigners among the five.
On the other hand
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, Poland had the least outsiders in 2011.In total, Polish people had emigrated by the most by 2011. Meanwhile, Spanish citizens left their country for the least in
this
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year. In detail, Deutschland was the most popular destination for European immigration with roughly 1.2
million
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in 2011. At the same time, Britain was the second most favourite target for settlers by over 1
million
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in that year.
On the contrary
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, Poland placed only 6 thousand newcomers at the time and took the lowest place on the list. Interestingly, Polish people left their country for the most by approximately 1.2
million
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in 2011.
By contrast
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, only 200 thousand Spanish immigrated in that year.
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, Italians were the second most people who got out of their homeland with roughly 900 thousand.
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, British and Deutsch immigrants moved to other countries
similarly
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by around half a
million
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in 2011.
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