You are arranged to visit a friend in Canada but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. Write a letter to your friend.In your letter. Explain the important event. Apologise for the situation. Suggest a new arrangements.

Dear Mr. James. Hi James, I'm Jake. I hope you are doing well.
First,
I apologize you to inform that I need to change the date of visiting your house. Originally, We promised to go to your house on 12th December, but My brother is going to marry that day. So it's too hard
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I
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meet
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you. I've expected to meet you either. I am really likely to be arranged that day
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brother's wedding.
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I kindly suggest to change our party to 19th December. In advance, I
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new airplane ticket,
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hasn't sold out yet. Do you mind if I
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visit
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19th, I'm going to bring
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drink that I made for you. After
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your schedule, please reply
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whether you could be possible or not. I'm so sorry to you once again and thank you for your understanding Best Regards.
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Coherence and Cohesion
Improve the logical flow of the letter by organizing ideas into clear paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure there is a smooth transition between ideas for better coherence.
Task Achievement
You successfully addressed each part of the task: explaining the event, apologizing, and suggesting a new arrangement.
Task Achievement
The writing tone is friendly and appropriate for writing to a friend.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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