The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.

The table shows the number of mobile phones sold in millions for a period of six years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and makecomparisons where relevant.
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The given table illustrates the amount of cell
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phone
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phones
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in millions which were purchased in a period of 6 years
according to
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different brands. As an
overall
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trend, Nokia and Samsung sold the most handphones
while
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Apple mobile
phone
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sales
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gradually rose. As shown in the illustration, Nokia was the best-selling
handphone’s
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handphone
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brand and the
sales
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increased from 2006 to 2011 before a fall in 2012 to 335
million
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unit
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units
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. Meanwhile, Samsung mobile
phone
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sales
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improved substantially from 117
million
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units
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in 2011 to about 397
million
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units
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in 2012. Apple cell
phone
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sales
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showed an upward trend from 2.3
million
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units
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in 2007
surged
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to around 136
million
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in 2012.
Next,
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Ericsson
sales
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fell considerably from 74
million
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units
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in 2006 to 28
million
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units
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in 2011.
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, the total of Motorola phones sold gradually dropped from 210
million
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in 2006 to 28
million
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units
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in 2012. In conclusion, over the span of six years, few brands maintained their
sales
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while
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others
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others'
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sales
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fell, and a new brand made a rise in the market.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words phone, sales, million, units with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sales volume
  • consistent increase/decrease
  • sales spike
  • remarkable drop
  • steady growth
  • fluctuation in sales
  • technological advancements
  • market competition
  • economic changes
  • sales performance
  • sales figures
  • overall trend
  • anomalies
  • external factors
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