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The maps describe how Riverside university campus changed over a 37- year period.

The maps describe how Riverside university campus changed over a 37- year period.
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The maps provide data about how Riverside
University
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 changed in
years
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the years
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 1973 and 2010.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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University
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the University
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 of Riverside significantly changed with many of the amenities being demolished or extended mainly
in
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on
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 the western
side
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 of the map. In detail,
Riverside
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on Riverside
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University
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 campus in 1973 , there
was
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were
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a
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apply
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economics and fine art buildings located in the north
that
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near the car park and
Sutudent
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Student
union
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.
As well as
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 , at the bottom
side
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which
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apply
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situated Administration and sciences buildings in the southeast so,
social
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and social
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 sciences, law and library paced
in
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on
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 the
south right
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south-right
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side
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.
Furthermore
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, there are
also
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a
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apply
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sporting fields
and
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ovals , and natural landscapes in the bottom right corner. Within 37 years ,
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University
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the University
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 campus had completely been restructured. First of all,
in
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on
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 the right of
western
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the western
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side
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 sporting field
nad
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and
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 ovals remained unchanged
while
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student
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the student
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 Union was erected
to
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in
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new
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a new
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 place near the sports
center
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.
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, Nature
reserve
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 was demolished to make the car park B
,
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and tram stop.
In addition
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 , in 2019 local people planned to construct
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a Medical
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 school building .
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, over the river was built
new
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a new
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 bridge. Turning to the northeast
side
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 economics , administration,
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and
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science buildings still exist
in
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on
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renewed
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a renewed
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 map.
Fine
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The fine
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 art building
which
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apply
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placed
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 in front of
economic
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the economic
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center
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centre
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 was elevated to make
information
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the information
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 sciences
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center
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centre
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. In the middle of the map
which
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apply
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situated library was expanded with new facilities.
Student
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The student
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 union
in
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on
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left
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the left
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side
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 was knocked down and replaced by car park A.
Additionally
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, both two social science and low blog constructions were added to one unique
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center
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centre
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, side, center with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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