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The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate the site of each place of a museum in the year 1998, which is been renovated over an eight-year period.
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, it is apparent
that
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how
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 museum had been modified after some dramatic changes, including far more recreational facilities for visitors.
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the
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both maps,
garden
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the garden
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sited
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was situated
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 at the
centure
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centre
century
,
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 in the redesigned plot, there was
setting
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a setting
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 area for
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a caffee
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caffee
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coffee
 shop in front of two fountains. There were some spaces for permanent
exhibitions
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exhibition
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 rooms
in
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on
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 the left and right of the plan,
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 after redecorating, those in the left-hand corner
are
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were
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 replaced by
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and temporary exhibition
room
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rooms
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. on the top, the space of
cafe
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the cafe
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 is reduced to
accomodate
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accommodate
 the WC, which was located
in
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at
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 the bottom of
permanent
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the permanent
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exhibitions
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exhibition
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 rooms on the
east-corner
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east corner
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 of the site. The place for keeping bags and coats and
shop
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the shop
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were
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was
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at
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on
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 the right side
in
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adjacent to the WC
in
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at
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 the bottom of the map, which
were
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was
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 located to the left-hand
corer
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corner
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in
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 the bottom of the Temporary exhibition room. Tickets,
entarance
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entrance
 and exit gate
was remained
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remained
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 unchanged in
this
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 period of time.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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