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Cambridge IELTS 9, Test 4 Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the worla. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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 are advantaged,
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 is the only way to equality for everyone.
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 some, it will be easy to use fewer
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, so several
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 should die out every year. In my opinion, I agree that using the same
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 ought to make it easier for people to have a better connection or it will be a good opportunity to have social politics. A good reason to diminish different
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 is to prevent
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 discrimination, for
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 English is a first-
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 which all people who want to apply to academic university need. At present, an invented
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that is
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 planned by humans is a reason to isolate people in the
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 because using the same
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 will help nations be closer.
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 without history, culture and roots can not exist, so the
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 will be unattractive and soulless. Another point to consider is that decreasing several
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 in the
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 would considerably contribute to removing conflicts and wars. Using equal
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,
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, enhances the economic problems to have an advanced
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 because modern societies have inhibited financial and economic crises. So, they prefer to use the same
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 that has been designed to be easy. In conclusion, having an international
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 which is internationally understood not only binds countries but
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 evolves the
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.
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 but not least, deleting a lot of
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 that values equal rights and one that wishes to advance.
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